Personal Snake Chimera Attacks

[Akira]

Kage no Hebi no Sutoraki [Shadow Snake Strike]

Self	Offensive/Supple.
Rookie	Personal

Description

Usually from under his cloak, the snake his suddenly move up and bite a nearby target that and inject its numbing venom into them. After two posts, the venom with take effect and cause the body to react slower to stimuli for three posts. With his fangs it takes four posts to take effect, and stays in effect for three more posts.

Hebi kawa no datsuraku [snake skin shedding]

Self	Supplementary
Rookie	Personal

Description

Shedding his skin, he removes any substance that was on his skin, as well as healing minor damage to his body. However, as this is the actual thing,  his skin is very sensitive and soft, thus he likely won''t be able to touch anything for five posts without causing extreme pain.

Shinkei doku [Nerve Poison]

Self	Offensive/Supple.
Rookie	Personal

Description

Secreting a specific poison from either the snake's mouth or his own, Akira can now (if the attack allows it) make a technique have the effect of poisoning the nerves, making them so sensitive that any form of pain is doubled. This negates the effects of Shinkei shūmatsu Doku. The poison is always in liquidous form , and for each use creates enough to cover a katana. The poison is always in liquidous form , and for each use creates enough to cover a katana.

Shinkei shūmatsu doku [Nerve Ending Poison]

Self	Offensive/Supple.
Rookie	Personal

Description

Secreting a specific poison from either the snake head or his own, Akira can now (if the attack allows it) make a technique have the effect of poisoning the nerves, dulling them to the point that the victim moves at a third the speed of their normal speed. The poison is always in liquidous form , and for each use creates enough to cover a katana. This causes the user to move at the speed a person a rank beneath then, unless they have a speed SA, in which case they move at average for their rank.

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[The Problem]

for shadow snake strike remove the mention of being able to do anything with your fangs as that would either be its own technique or an SA also the range would not be self but how far the snake can still reach the enemy also for a rookie poison I would say it takes four post to take effect and three post for duration also for a rookie tech I would just stick to localized numbing as numbing of the nervous system would be at least advanced level

skin shedding remove mention of the devil fruit as its confusing also describe the process of shedding more like how the shedding is actually done also at rookie level shedding of the skin will allow you to brush off minor damage like small cuts and bruises and such

so nerve ending is just the secretion of a certain poison if so how exactly do you secrete it and what form does it take and about how much can you make (keep in mind it should be limited due to its rookie rank) also at rookie level I would say the poison intensifies pain but would not make it that all contact hurts that would be at least veteran level

nerve ending same with the one above also rookie level wouldn't hinder speed that much making at rookie level I would say it makes the person move at a slower pace like from rookie to basic level with a speed SA or from intermediate without a speed SA to Rookie with a speed SA

I do not think that last tech is needed as you have two techs that allow you to secrete poison already

[Akira]

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